怎么写出高分英语书面表达

怎么才能写出高分英语作文呢？这绝对是困扰所有学生的一个烦人的问题。英语作文的分数在一张卷子中也占了挺重的比例，因此英语要拿高分，英语作文得高分是必不可少的条件。其实写好英语作文并不难，下面让我来给大家讲讲我是怎么写高分英语作文的吧！

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英语书面表达

原文

1、首先呢，这里给出我的一个同学叫我修改的一篇作文原型。这篇作文写得非常一般，大家可以先看看想想里面的一些错误的部分吧。H髫潋啜缅ello everyone .Now please let me introduce myself to you .My name is LiuFeng and l am twenty years old .I graduated from high school in the NanCheng .I am the only boy in my family.For my own hobbies l love play basketball ande listening to music and watch English movies and so on.For these hobbies you can see l not only like to sports and also like to live a feer life.For my parents both of them are workers. They are always busy working .Do not have much time to accompany me .But l also love they very much.At present l am satified with my life the activies in schoo are great of course my teachers and classmates are friendly to me. That is。

2、可以看到这篇英语作文语病不少，词汇全都是低级词汇而且语句也是简单句，通篇毫无亮点，下面让我来给大家看看我是怎么帮他修改的。可能我写的也不是非常好，但是对大家来说还是非常有借鉴意义的！

3、我们写作文的时候，语文老师经常会强调凤头猪肚和豹尾，这几个词非常恰当的写出了拿高分作文的技巧。下面让我来给大家细细分析下如何达到这几点。

凤头

1、凤头就是开篇尽量能有个复合句和高级词汇来向阅卷老师展示自己英语的深厚实力。比如，原文的Hello everyone .Now please let me introduce myself to you .我们可以改成：Hello everyone .As it's our first time to meet each other,please let me make a brief introduction to you guys.这样一个复合句就比原文的简单句好多了，而且能够给老师一开篇就有了良好的印象。

2、说到这，又要提到另外一个问题了。我们都知道，写作文开篇吸引眼球对自己能够拿高分是至关重要的，因此，不少同学就在开头来各种高级语句。这种做法运用的不当也是很致命的，很容易使得写作的内容偏题，使得效果适得其反。

3、例如，很多同学急于向老师展现自己积累的短语和高级句子，开头就写：As time goes by，a happy summer vocation has passed away......这样开头写这么多看似精彩的开头实际上已经跑题了。

猪肚

1、猪肚说的是文章的内容要充实饱满，不要太过单调乏味。因为阅卷老师通常是对文章的中间内容一扫而过的，所以尽量不要出语句语病就基本上没什么大问题了，我们要做的是尽量使文章内容丰满。

2、例如原文的I graduated from high school in the NanCheng .我们为了增加字数可以改写成：Maybe different from you，I was studying in a small but peaceful city called Nancheng.There is a very wonderful school——NO1 Middle School Of Nancheng with a long long history and I feel very proud that I can study in it.这样是不是好多了呢！

3、原文的For my own hobbies l love play basketball ande list髫潋啜缅ening to music and watch English movies and so on.For these hobbies you can see l not only like to sports and also like to live a feer life.这里有一个错误，对于我的兴趣爱好而言不是for 而是as for。还有就是play要改成playing。我们可以将这句话改成As for my hobbies,I love playing basketball with my friends and we often enjoy ourselves.After playing basketball we go home talking and laughing side by side in the sunset,which is a really fantastic thing and makes me wanna do that over and over again.

4、原文的For these hobbies you can see l not only like to sports and also like to live a feer life.我们可以再继续美化，适当加点连接词是非常必要的，如下What's more,listening to music is also my hobby which can let me feel free in the tiring and stressful world.

5、下面一句For my parents both of them are workers. They 锾攒揉敫are always busy working .Do not have much time to accompany me .But l also love they very much.怎么将其继续美化呢？请大家看看我写的怎么样吧：Both of my parents are workers.In order to earn a living and pay for my school fee,they are usually working hard,which causes that I can hardly have time to stay with them.However,we love eath other deeply and I make a promise I will buy them a big home and give them a happy and relaxing life someday.

豹尾

1、好的，写到这，豹尾终于来啦。豹尾就是讲究结尾干净利落并且让人回味无穷，这样的结尾能够打动阅卷老师，分数自然而然就上去啦！！

2、原文结尾At present l am satified with my life the activies in schoo are great of course my teachers and classmates are friendly to me. That is。我们可以看到有几处错误。首先单词有几个错误，这里我就不列举出来了大家都很容易看出来，还有就是结尾是That's all。

3、继续将其美化：As far as I'm concerned,I'm so satified with my life and the various of school activities that I love my univesity.I hope I can live in harmony with you and make progess everyday!

4、由于整篇文章是自我介绍，所以结尾加个That's all, thank you!会更好很多。